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Defiance by Ahrimatt Defiance by Ahrimatt
Dear Princess Celestia,

Today I learned a very valuable lesson about friendship. Friends are easily decieved and abused. And so are you, Princess.

You have fulfilled your purpose in granting me the powers of an alicorn, but now you are nothing more than a hindrance to my studies. You have expended your usefulness to me, and as such I need you no longer.

What exactly am I talking about, you may wonder? It's simple, really. You thought me the most talented unicorn in Equestria, but have you ever wondered why is that? There are powers lying beyond your grasp, Princess, powers that you'd call forbidden and dangerous. Powers that have found me worthy the day you met me, powers I have studied for years. And now, thanks to your 'blessing', I shall wield them boundlessly.

The final summoning is soon to be complete, and once it is done you will hear of me no more. I can hear their whispers in my head, they are calling to me, they want me to unlock their final secrets... and I am more than willing to answer their call.

Take heed, Princess. Dark clouds gather upon the horizon.

Your former student, Twilight Sparkle.

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This... this turned out to be quite different to what I originally imagined. But I think it looks just as good, or perhaps even better than the first idea. It's gotta be my first non-vector work that took me some effort to make, but I have to say, I really like it the way it is. And trust me, I don't often like what I make.


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:iconchiantiarts:
Outstanding! Inspiring! The best work as always! I love it!
Just for critique, the position of the face is somewhat off taking a look at this masterpiece. But still, it's magnificent!
The way you did the shading is like 3D realism! I would think of the picture as Twilight no longer a princess eversince Celestia forsakened her, but then tries to kill her. And in the end, is banished forever.
I don't know what else to say, for this is beautiful and awesome! Keep this up and your work will improve in no time! All you need is improvement and respect.
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Hello there! This is a very lovely piece and I would like to give you some feedback for it. I'm sorry if some of my critique might sound rude for this but I'm trying to be helpful.

First off, I'm not really trying to your not good at making ideas but the idea of Twilight betraying Celestia has been used since the show was first created and even since Twilight was turned into an alicorn. I'm not trying to say that your not creative but its just a point that this is a very over used idea and it becomes a bit boring to read the back stories even if they are interesting, I know it is just going to be the same thing over again.

Next, shading is wonderful. I can tell the sign isn't suppose to be too bright and it faintly glows. I also really like how the moon clashes with the lighting of the sign as well.
The only thing that brothers me about this lighting is that,there doesn't seem to be much red light on Twilight. I get that it is a faint light but I would figure that this would be reflected onto Twilight herself.
Just another thing to add. The magic(I'm guessing so) raising from the sign seems to be too solid. I suggest that this should be make transparent so that it doesn't block out the background too much.
Other then that, everything seems to be find with the lighting and is really done well.

Now, Twilight is drawn really well. There isn't a lot of glaring details in this that are easy to point out if any. Though, I have seen some details though.

The right(my right) back leg looks like it just cuts off. I'm not sure if that was because the ponies legs are normally skinny or you didn't draw it in by accident. All I can say for that since a leg is easy to fix and there isn't much detail to go into the topic of how pony legs should be drawn correctly, that maybe you should make the inside of the leg more visible.

Also the wings are a bit odd looking. I mean they do look like feathered wings and not just a big pile of hair or fur like I see most of the time. The only reason why I point them out is that birds in natural aren't able to have wings open like that if the wings are pointing backwards. If they are pointing forward then I can see how that would work and I can accept that but in the picture, I'm almost thinking that the wings are slightly pointed backwards but then again I could be wrong.

Lastly, the background. I have to say that this is a really well done. The open textbook and the wheel that can be slightly seen in the background is really good I have to say.
I do have just a small bone to pick with how some of the books are standing straight up without support on the bottom shelf. I know physics don't really have to be applied to a piece but considering that I know quite a bit about this type of science it bugs me a bit. Thankfully though, like stated early, this is not a glaring error that stands outs even people who know a lot about science and study art. The error is not easily reconsidered so that's a good start if you noticed after you have drawn a picture that there is a minor error. The books on the bottom shelf seem to be strangely propped up. I would suggest that if you do go back and touch up this picture in the future(or not but for future reference) it might be better to bring those two books closer together or have them both leaning on each other. I hope that wasn't too confusing...

Thank you for reading my critique and I hope that you improve and have future success if I don't see or talk to you again.

Have a nice day/evening/night/morning/(etc.)
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Nina-Dragons-12 Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Use dark magic only once, you lose yourself to it's affects.
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Necroant Featured By Owner Edited Dec 19, 2014
>will here of me

ehm, 'hear'?
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:iconahrimatt:
Ahrimatt Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
It's been almost 2 years and just now someone noticed :iconfacepalmplz:

Thanks, edited.
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Necroant Featured By Owner Edited Dec 19, 2014
Shit hapens. Great art btw, i like how Twilight looks not so much stereotypically evil as just grumpy.
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Urvy1A Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
All hail Tyrant Sparkle
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HailMyself Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014
Great, now she call for The Dark Gods from Warhammer 40K. Just great. Like Discord is not enough Chaos already.
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Ahrimatt Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
There is never enough chaos.
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Davaughanbro2 Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013
Ia! Ia! Cthulhu Fhtagn! Ph'nglui mglw'nafh Cthulhu R'lyeh wgah'nagl fhtagn!


All of my yes to this. 
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Ahrimatt Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:D
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bolemis Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2013
Oh my god yes! I demand more of this dark (half dark) stuff!
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:iconahrimatt:
Ahrimatt Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I'm sure I had something sketched out already...

IF ONLY I HAD THE WILL TO DRAW IT!!!
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darksmirf Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013
I hope Spike gets to be her demonic assistant
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Ahrimatt Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Unless he's a first sacrifice to make.
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DeadlockAt Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013
I love corrupted twilight.

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:iconahrimatt:
Ahrimatt Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Not corrupted. Improved.

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DeadlockAt Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013
Or dark and 200% more cooler if you saw all the other dark, corrupted and improve Twilights, really twilight has more alter egos than the other mane 6.
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Nagneto Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
CHAOS!
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:iconahrimatt:
Ahrimatt Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Undivided!
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:iconfazbearclaim:
FazbearClaim Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Professional Writer
THE DEVIL HAS RISEN!!!!!!!!!
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:iconahrimatt:
Ahrimatt Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
'The Seven Hells hunger. And Equestria is such a lovely place to stop by for a snack.'
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FazbearClaim Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013  Professional Writer
I know.
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Silentmana Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013
Twilight Sparkle: Warlock!
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:iconahrimatt:
Ahrimatt Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Anything but a princess is great. And the darker the better.
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verge-1 Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Student
.....THE DARKSIDE MUUUAHAHAHA!!!!!!!!
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Ahrimatt Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Nah, it's just the better side.
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tycad355 Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013
Hail Satan!!!
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:iconahrimatt:
Ahrimatt Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
No, satan sucks.
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ShadowoftheHive Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2013  Student Writer
HAIL CTHULHU!
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Ahrimatt Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
That I can approve of.
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DoughnutJoe Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013
Princess Celestia said in the finale that she is now Twilight's student too. Sounds like she is receiving her first lesson. :)
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Ahrimatt Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
And the lesson is: Celestia, you f!@#ed up big time.
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I-am-Evil-Tree Featured By Owner May 26, 2013
I appear to be on an evil/corrupted/possessed Twilight binge today :D
This has to be one of the more original evil Twilight deviations I've seen in that the others she became evil due to corruption by Sombra or whatnot, here she's become evil out of her own free will.
Art wise I love the detail you put into her mane, wings and eyes. The mane especially, it looks like she's been up all night to make that magic circle
Talking of the circle that's good too, the flicker of red flames and the unearthly glow, like a different form of dark magic, more powerful but less poisonous then Sombra's

Awesome description by the way, I can see the scene she writes that right now, ending with her striking off the letter with a boldness unlike her others
Great work :D
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Ahrimatt Featured By Owner May 27, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
The corruption/possession theme gets boring quickly in my honest opinion. What fun is there to see a character turn 'bad' against their will? It's the free will, the plotting, and the secrets which make it all interesting :D

And thank you, I'm glad you like it!
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RaenBoow Featured By Owner May 5, 2013  Student Digital Artist
It's very pleasant to look at :clap: + the story is refreshing :D I have never heard of this angle until now O-o (I should have but I had not >__> )
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Ahrimatt Featured By Owner May 5, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I worked my ass off on this so it better be! :D And the story is what I would like to see happen. It is what SHOULD happen :x
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RaenBoow Featured By Owner May 6, 2013  Student Digital Artist
It would be HIGHLY surprising if it actually became the canon ending to this show xD
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:iconahrimatt:
Ahrimatt Featured By Owner May 6, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Indeed... sometimes I think I chose the wrong show to follow :/
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Diebro210 Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
very nice
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Ahrimatt Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you :)
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rayray12k Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013
(This is just to honor and give respect to the one who drew this. I do not know him nor does he know me, but I wish to ask permission for me to place a fictional letter about this.)

A letter by a Tyzuikan shinobi, working for the inter-police of Arukania and Tyzuika, to his captain,

"Greetings, Captain.

It was just as you feared. Celestia's student has fallen to her own evil.

You were right to send me to spy upon her, with me in cloak and hidden away, unable to be detected or sensed by anyone.

Her friends, I must say with respect, must be warned of this. I know I may not be above you in rank, but I am suggesting a better way.

Warn her friends and help them prepare for this. This is what best I can think sincerely for any suggestion.

Equestria...is no longer what I can, in my opinion, assume that it is alright...

The Templar of the old temple was right about them and of Twilight...their world is about to suffer the same fate as we have did.

May they not lose too much than we have lost when our fallen brethren invaded Ranshin. It has gotten out of hand.

- Ruse Tiyre Xashi Tuisha
Intelligence Division of the Inter-Tyzuikan-Arukanian Police Force "
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GreenSkullplz Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2013
Fantastic Twilight picture
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Ahrimatt Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you :)
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GreenSkullplz Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013
Your Welcome
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Bobloblaws123 Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013
FANFIC..... NOW.......
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Ahrimatt Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I'M ON IT!
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The-Dark-Lord-Link Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow! Astounding atmosphere, awesome story, and lovely darkness. Well done! :clap:
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Ahrimatt Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks! :)
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The-Dark-Lord-Link Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Pleasure. :D
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Hollyleafwolf Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
AJDHLJAS WHERES THE SALT?! ((i had to put a supernatural reffrence in there because i just had to.. but its a awesome picture c:))
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Ahrimatt Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Yay, thanks! :D
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